All Comments on 'Zumba'

I think this needs at least another chapter...

Please tell me there is more to this story and that it has a wonderful ending...?

You need more detail. It was good. I liked the fact that your story was more raw, instead of all luvy-duvy like most get, but you should try & take it slow. Write down everything, every detail you can. People will want more to read.

U didn't gt off b4 u left? Nt gud.

30% sex 70% introduction? Really? I mean, what there was was great, but we need more detail. Also try to get into their heads a little bit, not just "and she came," but her emotions as well.

Cant stories be written as rape anymore?

My husband has no idea that I want to be the one on my knees licking Lisa's wet pussy