All Comments on 'The Muse'

Now I must visit the River Walk and find that back door! Already eliminated Paesano's; you didn't mention its signaure dish. ;-)

I discovered your submission list four days ago, and have read nothing else since. You have a gift for storytelling, and I feel privileged to have the opportunity to enjoy it. I can't help but feel genuine concern for your characters: literally cringing as I could almost physically feel Richard's anxiety at the bistro, nearly crying myself as I read about Mary pleading painfully for Bob's silence, and cheering inwardly as Richard came so gallantly to Mary's rescue as she was viciously ambushed on the talk show. With greater detail, I could easily see this story becoming a film I'd joyfully take my wife to see.

Well done, as always. I look forward to more of your consistently spectacular work.

This is the 1st of your stories for me.

Loved it, especialy the end.

Going to read your other stories.

This story is told from Mary's point of view - and the author of this work is male. It sure works here. Thanks for ending a long dry spell for me trying to find a story with characters I care about. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

It was absolutely wonderful. At first I thought it was going to lead to some kind of conflict between Mary and Richard because at times it felt like Richard was trying to see Mary as Melissa and not Mary herself, but you subtly and beautifully addressed that conflict and nipped it in the bud as soon as it came up. This whole story is incredible and a must-read. Thank you for sharing :)

Characters so believable, I lost track of time. I would really love to see all of these folks again. The author left us with a wonderful cliffhanger.

While there was some lack in description i must say this is the best story I've found on here in a very long time. Well written, great story. Any chance of a continuation?

Great story! Well written and quite romantic. I was at the "River Walk" fifteen years ago and the tour boats and restaurants are fun. Expensive shops and hotels prevail. Cheers!

I'll second that. A great story. Well written and very romantic.

Not much sex. Sex is alluded to a lot. Almost PG-13.

A wonderful romance with nice character development and a nice set of build ups.

If you are looking for quick sex, this is not it. But if you are looking for sexy romance that leaves a warm feeling inside this is your ticket.

Just one word of thanks and appreciation for sharing your story! "WOW"

This was the very best. Words are not enough to describe that.

What an absolutely wonderful story. Loved it.

What a wonderful story. I really hated to see it end. Would you consider another?

I appreciate all the comments and emails. I am very pleased that a modern romantic fairy tale has done so well. I really enjoyed writing it.

'The Rehab' is out being edited and should be posted in a week or so. This new one sucked some life out of me and is darker than 'The Muse.'

I am also deep into 'The Promise' and hope to have it out before years end. I only know the beginning and part of the middle. I have no idea how to end it yet. Very dark start - I want to find a lot of light along the way.

Found your work a couple of months back, can't wait for more!

Thank you!

C

I couldn't stop reading! The characters were so relatable & the writing made me feel like I was watching a movie. I could see it all in my head. This was such a pleasant read, & so very romantic-- not trashy smut. Kudos! Please don't stop, you have a wonderful gift! :)

So good!! A wonderful story! Probably the only one I've ever seen where the stalker gets the girl & it's actually ok! :) Lol! Really! Such a good read! The chars were real (funny, stubborn, anxious, self conscious) & the writing was clever.

Would make a good short web film. Author has talent! Keep going!

Great story that really sucked me in. Usually do not read longer stories, but this one grabbed me through the end. Would have preferred a bit more sex, but this is a great story.I will read some of your other stories. Keep sending new one in!

The mixing of past glimpses and stolen moments gave the story more meat. The ending was a surprise. Well done. Looking forward to your next story..

Strongly disagree with AMerryMan. I think the story is very well thought out and executed. Special kudos to the editor. I'm a real stickler for things like language mechanics and story continuity, and I only noticed two minor errors in the whole story. Good job!

I loved your story, I loved it so much that I almost didn't read last two pages, thought you might screw it up, you know when writers write masterpiece and when they review it before writing the end they get excited with work they done and scew up the ending, just trying to keep up the flow the quality. But you didn't , the ending was good too, I wished it wouldn't end though. Keep writing more please.

I read several hours each day and your writing is the BEST

Thanks impatiently waiting for more!!!

I mostly read Literotica in the Loving Wife section. A couple of months ago I noticed you had a very high score for The Gift. (Your only LW story to date). I discovered your quality of writing then and I am trying to keep up with everything you write. Amazing tales. Thank you DreamCloud. Five stars as usual.

Real good. Thank you

... Again

I want to commend you for writing this story touching on Anxiety Disorder. Very well written - 5 stars is too low a value to give! Thanks!

Great writing!...and original material! I hope you keep 'em coming 'cause I'll keep reading and rating 5 stars! Your writing is among the best on this site and it is a privilidge to be able to read your stories...thank you.

Like it very much.

Thanks for sharing....

I enjoyed it immensely.

You are a skilled writer with very original ideas. It doesn't get any better than that.

Thank you very much.

I've lost a LOT of sleep since discovering your works. These all need to be turned to screenplay and put to film.

DC wrote Mary credibly - easy to empathize with her. Another ***** story - excellent romance!

DC, you are absoluly at the top as a author of romance stories.

Wow! Very believable and quite well written. I am going to be reading a lot more of your stories. Keep them coming!

You seem to like molding and melting, a lot. Your descriptions of the lovers thoughts and actions already convey the molding and the melting, so it seems contrived or over done to use those words, repeatedly. I should add I've read most of your work over a short period of time, and those words appear frequently. So I may be projecting onto this story what I've noticed as a cumulative use. It's all the constructive criticism I can offer for now. Everything else was very well done. I hope you keep writing, for everyone's benefit.

Once again, another wonderfully written, and believable story!

Thank you!

Wow. this is one hell of a story. I didn't know what to make of Richard at the beginning, I thought he was a bit of a weirdo. But you managed to turn my thinking around, he turned into quite a guy. This was an outstanding love story, yes, I mean a True Love Story. I could actually feel the love between these two. It was some real fine writing. Thank You for and original, entertaining and enjoyable story.

Yet that was without a doubt the best story I've read on this site. Wow!

Brilliant work! Really sweet story and well crafted!

What a masterpiece of romance , love the way you layer , intertwine thoughts , emotions beautifully . Such a sweet , tender lovable couple.

Absolutely incredible! I love all of your work!

An excellent read and a feel good story. dialog is excellent IMHO!

I really enjoyed "The Muse". Such a warm and wonderful story. One that deserves more than just 5 stars, IMO. Thank you again! :)

MastersWench

I need more! This needs to be made into actually bound copies! Please continue the series.

...that I come up with just seem sort of weak when I try to describe this story.

"He wrote what he felt and I felt what he wrote."

Awesome!

I read that sentence four times, it was so good!

This story succeeds, for me, on SO many levels.

Thank you. For writing. For sharing what you write with the rest of us.

thank you.

I have to wonder how many variations are in the heads of readers for the pronunciation of the name of the publishing company?

Themes could be said many different ways

Thoroughly enjoyed reading this romance. A sequel would be nice, but this tale can certainly stand on its own.

Thank you for share this story with us.

Brujay

Writing, characters and plot all superb. However, it did remind me of a something I had always wondered about. There are some truly gifted writers on this site. Some that write ten or more stories and then you never hear from them again. I always wondered if they just got their feet wet here and then went on to fame and fortune using another "nom de plume" as you put it. At least, I liked to think that's what became of them. Thank you for a truly beautiful story.

You truly are a gifted writer. I am indeed grateful that you choose to share your stories here. I'm enthralled by everything I've read of your work and I eagerly await another trip to the clouds; for truly that is where I am elevated when I'm reading your work. Thank you for the journeys that you've shared and I look forward to more.

I just finished reading "The Muse",and really enjoyed it. Now to the "small ding" the word 'ecliptic' pertaines to the path of the sun thru the celestial plane. The only reason I mention it at all is that it stood out glaringly when I read it. But other than that a "Damn good read" as most of your work is. Keep writing.

you are an amazing writer. you need to be published. i loved this story. please marry me now?

This didn't even get my wife jealous. 28 years of marriage and she laughed at me. She has my soul securely wrapped around her heart.

I must respectively decline.

i could not control my bursts of laughter when ever mary was identified as melissa by male fans, & the fact only 5% made up for the female readers, ....may be my arrogance and or ignorance but who the hell are these male fans reading romance novels of adam westlake??? ;-D

otherwise just a simple story but eloquently described, yet tantalisingly captivating.

I was confused when I read "that only 5% of the readers were female"?!? Really?

- Then I realized that this story was the male equivalent of "Mommy porn - 50 Shades of Grey". OMG, I'm reading ... "Daddy Porn". 😱 Tee hee

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Mary Higgins _____

Mamma Mia atsa spicy meatball

and so many more.

I too liked that his reading interest was so broad it was celestial in orbit.

Another intriguing and irrepressible tale...I expect nothing less...THANKS!!!

What an interesting concept!

An eclectic reader envisions Benjamin Wood's first-person female protagonist. No less about artistic motivation; paint is that medium, words this.

That somebody who can write this well has such a poor vocabulary.

You don't know the word "eclectic"? Seriously?

Your grammar is poor, your vocabulary worse.

Get yourself a REAL editor. Pronto.

Would love to see a sequel. Really liked the characters.

VisualPerv

Just to add my two cents, anyone who thinks a typo is evidence of a poor vocabulary has never written a story. I see many typos in the writings (of very famous and wealthy authors) that professional editors missed. So what? Anyone with a genuine criticism should not hide behind "Anonymous." What are they afraid of?

DreamCloud is a storytelling genius. Don't give these masterpieces away for free. Please put them into a collection and sell them on Amazon. They are better than 99% of the other stuff selling on Kindle.

DreamCloud, your stories are wonderful. Please do not let these dreamers make you feel badly about your work. a truly sharp mind will not notice errors in the writing but will fill in the correct word automatically. When I graduated from high school I could read at 600+ wpm with 90% retention and that was reading every word, in addition I had a college vocabulary. Do not allow persons with limited minds and jealous hearts.get to you. I can not write a story if my life depended on it, I live on yours. the Muse and the Mountain are up with Woodmanone and MoogPlayer. Shine the rest of these naysayers on and write for me and the others who like you.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

One of the best romances ever. Excellent character development. Mary's character is especially well written. Not enough stars to push for this one.

but not in a sloppy way...

Some writers "wrap up" their story in so little space that's it like they couldn't think of anything else..

This doesn't feel like that... It feels like the prince kissing Sleeping Beauty, her eyes opening, and that's the end... We all know it proceeds to "... And they lived happily ever after.".

Really, what more do you need...?

which books they had each other read.

beautiful story.

thank you

is a very well developed character. I kept waiting for something terrible to happen as is characteristic of many of your stories. Having discovered you only recently, I'm working my way through your stories. An enjoyable experience.

I found one of your stories quite by accident. I've been a literotica reader for ages but somehow missed your work. Glad I ultimately found my way! I've been burning through them like vacationer pounding too many margaritas. No self control, no pacing, just shooting them back with wreckless abandon.

Thank you for giving my romantic heart such a feast! My cup runneth over!

He was an ecliptic reader, dabbling in a bunch of genres.

SHOULD BE:

He was an ECLECTIC reader, dabbling in a bunch of genres.

EXPLANATION:

The ecliptic is the apparent path of the Sun on the celestial sphere, and is the basis for the ecliptic coordinate system.

eclectic

adjective

1. selecting or choosing from various sources.

2. made up of what is selected from different sources.

3. not following any one system, as of philosophy, medicine, etc., but selecting and using what are considered the best elements of all systems.

4. noting or pertaining to works of architecture, decoration, landscaping, etc., produced by a certain person or during a certain period, that derive from a wide range of historic styles, the style in each instance often being chosen for its fancied appropriateness to local tradition, local geography, the purpose to be served, or the cultural background of the client.

noun

5. Also, eclecticist [ih-klek-tuh-sist] (Show IPA). a person who follows an eclectic method, as in philosophy or architecture.

A good bit "Castle"ish but damn good!

You should revisit them!

Word Processors are truly a wonderful boon to an aspiring Author .

and Predictive text can really speed up getting your thoughts and ideas onto the page without the worry of overthinking spelling errors .... Sadly sometimes this leads to wrong word selection and Free editing & Proof reading will sometimes fail to pick up on & correct the errors ....

Yes one can turn off the predictive text feature , & thus create a piece that will need much more time & effort by those Volunteer Editors & Proof readers ... which in my view is a big ask for a story that is being provided for Free

spelling mistake , combined with predictive text can and does lead to some crazy word selections ... although one would note that this Author only has the occasional blip or problem with it ..

And so , i would like to take the time to Congratulate the Author & volunteer editors/proof readers .. for a job well done

and for sharing with us here at Literotica some most wonderful Free stories

i truly Enjoy the tales DreamCloud has produced that so often have such damaged / emotionaly challenged people meeting and somehow finding happiness & a wonderful future ... blessed

5 stars

xxxTwistedOliverxxx

Just got done reading the whole story...LOVED the ending! Janice is going to go mildly insane...

Watch the use of your grammar. Past tense, present tense and future tense..othewise, the story was pretty good.🤓

I have thoroughly enjoyed working through some of your stories over the past few days - all have been more than worthy of the 5 star ratings I've give them and this one is no exception.

There may well be odd typo's and grammar hiccups but honestly the stories are so compelling I skipped through them without missing a beat. Long may your writing continue.

I have to think you share your talents elsewhere as well, where can we read you? This is a stone cold 5*

You have the ability to convey human emotion in a way that is very relatable by the reader. The theme of true love winning out is pervasive in your writings and it is a good one. We all believe that, or want to, except for the truly damaged.

I can go on and on but sir I look forward to your next post on Lit.

I'm not going to lie: I love this story so much. I felt the emotional intensity deeply. And strangely enough, this piece of literature actually updated my list of: known acts and things that turn me on sexually". :))))

I tell you before, you are my favorite author of Romance stories!

This story was great, lovely, and all the wonderful words can I imagine.

I love the story, and specially the end, is GREAT!

Please (I know is an old tale), keep in mind for write a sequel of this story.

The world need more writers like you. If they are, the world are better and happy.

5* for you, because I have not the possibility to give more.

I can`t wait to read more Romance stories from you.

Many thanks for your work and time.

You only need to find a good producer to enter to Hollywood by the great door!

I see these small writing imperfections and feel that if all the writers had proof readers and editor to make the stories perfect or near perfect, I suspect that we all would have shell out some cash in order to read. Please stop complaining as I do not want to have to use my visa to pay to read the stories that I select!

Baton Rouge Cajun.

You craft characters that are deep, complex, and believable. I'd like to know them in real life and each time I finish one on your stories I'm simultaneously glad for reading it and disappointed that it is over. Bravo!

A second read through for me. As an O.C.D., ex PR writer where fact and grammar is an absolute, I totally forgive all the silly typo errors. Why? Because real creative writing trumps grammar every time. It is always a shock, given the nature of this site, when you can read eloquent and empathic stories that have genuine heart-warming appeal. Thank you DreamCloud for all your contributions. Chapeau!!

The title of my comment says it all.

Any DreamCloud story is my favorite while I'm reading it, but this one is special. I'm in awe at how much The Muse consumed me. It's even better than the first time I read it. It's just perfection. This is my favorite story and I'll enjoy re-reading it over and over. Thank you DreamCloud

I found DreamCloud and started reading from the top. So far all the stories are great. The Muse, has lifted the bar. This was an exceptionally well written and empassioned story.

DoW

Loved it!!!!!

i feel this story is way weaker than anything other i have read from you. i have rated all your stories 5* so far but im going for 4 this time

i couldnt feel the characters this time and it felt more like a Sugar daddy story to me. still very well written though.

First off, I love dreamcloud's fictional account of a fiction writer. Like a self-portrait in prose. Very well done. Also, and this is one of my best compliments, your story was so engaging that I can overlook your plethora of grammatical and vocabulary missteps. I know of many books I have paid for that I cannot say that about. I just had to get those out of the way.

Now, onto my comment based on my title. You could have made Richard much like the cantankerous anti-social asshat that Jack Nicholson played in "As Good as it Gets" but you chose to, instead, portray him as an endearingly shy man who loves wholely and is a man of character who deserves to win his Melissa. I applaud you for this. I have marked this story as one of my favorites and I know I will come back to it again and again.

Thank you for so generously sharing your talent and your heart with your words.

to ones advocation, TK U MLJ LV NV

This one was a 5 ,I mean, 10. Great job. Thank you

This one is right in the pocket. Not too hot, not too cold- just right. You take a theme and shake it by the ears until all the good stuff falls onto the screen. Happy writer; Happy reader.

You should do a romantic story with firefighters. Just saying, Im a future firefighter, and I think a dramatic tragic story about about firefighter love would be amazing. But I love your stories. So amazing, all 5 stars

Ecliptic reader on page four? Surely you meant eclectic reader!

And then on page six: what do you think I would like on TV? probably should be

What do you think I would look like on TV? or maybe

Why do you think I would like to be on TV? though my money is on option one.

Please don't feel bad about my comments. Just two in seven pages.... Tim431431 must be reading more attentively ;)

Another amazingly imaginative plot. Your stories are always so fresh.

And, no, the copy editing errors are minor and few.

once again a"very good read"i hope you keep spittin em out.

hornyoldgoat6969

Your writing skills never cease to amaze me! What a great story! A lot of interesting plot twists all revolving around romance. Great Job once again!

second time around better than the first, I enjoyed it more, and so many possibilities for more. Thanks for your excellence, and hard work.

NorthPacific

I would like a second chapter where Mary gets pregnant and has the baby. and the baby grows up and other things. Like the Link.

I hope you can sue the H**l out of the rotter & his publisher. Rant over. You are such a goood writer. As an 85 year old widower, living on SocSec, mostly my only enjoyment is reading Non-erotic and Romance on here. And you are one of the best. Thank you. The Muse had me laughing out loud. Please, when things get settled, write some more for me and your other (million) admirers. / Just J

That's all I have to say, beautiful . You really have a talent for writing. Many a day I am late for work wanting to finish a story or chapter.

Keep at it and hope you get published some day.

Said it best. I so wish you were still writing DreamCloud . I have reread your stories so many times it probably borders on obsession. Thank you thank you thank you

I’ve never read a pot-boiler romance though I admit the covers are fun. I think you’ve out done them. Spot of advice. I’ve noticed you are beset with homonyms. Like “ecliptic reader.” Ecliptic describes the earth’s orbit. Eclectic means wide-ranging, inclusive. Just a thought, but you might want to consult a thesaurus on occasion.

sheer unadulterated fun.

stories I've read in awhile. Of course all DreamCloud's stories are phenomenal. I've enjoyed every one I've read. Thanks!