All Comments on 'Dark Weres Ch. 02'

This has the makings of a good story but it's so fast paced it is hard to grab the attention of your reader. Slow down, take your time. It's not a race. It's a story. Let us have information but put in proper dialogue and descriptive verbs to make it more exciting.

And please stop with the "we're so downtrodden" crap. They're wolves. They're stronger than this.

Some people can keep a grudge long time and other people can be too stupid for their one good .You caught their point of view , but always is hope something better will come .

Thank you for sharing this story .

Love the chapter. I like that this werewolf story is different from the typical Were story.

Good story.

Thanks for reading this tale. Chapter 2 posted right before February. Chapter 3 will be submitted at the end of February.

Great update...I love all your stories.

It's a good story but it's also hard to read.

This reads more of a news report than an actual 'story'. There is no character development and the plot is all over the place, changing from paragraph to paragraph. A story is more than a bunch of facts strung together - you need pacing, character development (so we can care about them & they are not one dimensional), layers of emotional connectivity, reasons why the reader can become invested (care) about they story you are telling. Your writing has none of this. I have continued to read, hoping that after the avalanche of background details, you would actually start telling the story - but nope, just more of the same stuff. Good luck - you actually have a fabulous premise and this story could reach readers on so many levels.

Interesting