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Wow................
This was awesome, Made me very wet ...........
:o)
mmmmm
you made me cum
Oh yeah...
That's how a girl likes it....
Hot, hot, hot!
Delicious imagery and rhythm.
Damn that's hot
mmm that is sexxxy...love the visuals and how hot it got me.
I love ...
all the stuff you write.
HOT!!!
Goddess, I'm wet now!!!
that turned me on
that was just really hot you are a good writer, and i am thinking you are probablly an excellent lover
Breathless~
Your words jumped straight from the computer screen forming a pleasurous cyclone that swirled around my center, leaving me dizzy with desire and need.
This was not only very well written, and thought out, but is also indicative that it is written by someone with great knowledge of what takes a woman beyond the edge of passion and pushes her into the abyss.
Damn this is booming
my girl read this as i ate her and the orgasm was awesome
Image & Tone!
Nice tone and tempo I thought it was a nice to read even got me wanting this girl. Your voice is great! Keep writing.
MMmmmm hmmmm
Hell yeah - can I hear more, baby?
Yummy
Loved this, can you do it again?
[b] throb . . . throb . . . .
Generally I dislike poems without end punctuation. Nonetheless the, *blushes* erm...impact of this poem was profound. Therefore a 5 from me. *runs to the bedroom*
Pretty Freakin Awesome
This is really good, the imagery, left me turned on to say the least.
are you single
Can't imagine you not being a great lover.
O'sMG you so turned me with words.
I loved this, Master Dom....
That was a very erotic poem. This is also my first time at this erotic stories website. I myself write erotica. I have my own erotic blog. I'd love to send you the URL, but I don't have an email for you. I love BDSM fantasies and literature, but haven't yet experience enough of it! I love spanking, also! And cunnilingus, tantra, full-body orgasms, and my glass dildo! Women, men, rock bands, panta panta pant!!!! Love, Linda from the SF Bay Area in Calif.
Getting it on.
Torrid love making ~ pulling out all the erotic stops.
wonderful
just my style of poetry
i really enjoyed it
~MIS
thanks
thank you for the comments
hell yes
I am not into poetry. howeveryou can lick my clit anytime!
Delicious
Very powerful imagery... i can feel what you are describing when i read this...damn very hot
Tasteful
Tasteful and realistic. So vivid I could almost taste it.
Very well done.
OH YEAH!
OKIES...might just have to add this to a favs list...tasteful and vivid...LOVED it...Yes VERY well done
*looks around for Lover to try talking him into fulfilling THAT poem*
Thank you
If you liked this you might like my blog
Wow
A definite hot and sexy poem. Very arousing.
Very Well Done
Very well done, vivid, and just as if you were watching me as I do the same to my wife.
tongue flicking
i love it when girls tongue are flicking super fast
carnivale
I love the line.... "hips like a carnival ride" so cool!
me too
hips like a carnival ride
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I ejoyed the beginning of the poem as it was bang on, excuse the pun, but from the ass slap to the end you lost me. For someone so understanding of the clitoris it was anti climactic to read sex was fron behind and no longer engaging the clit at all. Did she orgasm? She seemed to begin as the focus then took a back seat to the penis in the latter half.
Keep it up . . .
Don't listen to the critics . . . it made me extremely wet. ;D
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