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Chicago Hotel Adventure Ch. 05

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by Anonymous

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by spyro112309/08/04

LOVED IT

i loved every installment of this series! Every time i saw a new one come up it was like getting a new present. I was very afraid something awful would happen to the couple but was very happy to find such a sweet and wonderful ending. It was everything i look for in an erotic story.

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by Anonymous09/08/04

The Tender Trap

This is a great series. It is sexy, romantic and tender.

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by Anonymous09/08/04

great series

This was a great series and love every part of it. I only have one complaint. I was so completely enthralled by the first four parts. I loved the stories and the characters and by part five didn't care as much about the sex. I was disappointed that there was not very much development in this latest installment. It was only sex.

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by berdon09/09/04

Awesome

Awesome.

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by ShyCollegeGuy09/09/04

Amazing.

For several years, I've been reading stories on this website. I've read a whole lot of them, but I've never posted a comment. I've never even rated a story. This, however ... this was something else.

There are other very good stories and other very good authors out there. What set this series apart was the vividness with which you paint your characters. I'd close my eyes at night before drifting off to sleep and imagine Wes and Sylvia, feeling as though I understood their love -- however fictional -- from your incredible writing here. Needless to say, I don't often think about the stories I read here ... afterward.

To envision two people (whose personalities resonate so strongly with many of us here, I'm sure) so devoted to each other, so happy to be able to let loose and share with one another, so excited by each other's presence, represents, for me, the beauty of life and love more pure than anything else I've seen on the web.

A masterpiece. I'm incredibly impressed and deeply touched. Certainly more so than I'd ever thought a Lit story would touch me. There's nothing else I can say, I think.

Just one more thing, I guess. You're right ... "it doesn't totally suck."

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by GodBlessTexas09/11/04

I am not worthy!

What a wonderful ending to the best story on Lit! Thanks for the awesome ride!

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by Anonymous09/22/04

amazing

I think I love you! I've never read a story with so much passion and tenderness. It's absolutely amazing.

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by Anonymous09/28/04

Wow!

That was simply one of the best pieces of literature, period. You totally amazed me with a great story on top of all of the great sex!! Musicians; gotta love 'em!

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by xzchief09/30/04

Great series

Thanks for writing it.

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by VegasGal6910/17/04

Wonderful

It's so easy to feel where these two kids are coming from and how they feel. I find myself wishing I had an experience like that. Good job..I'm really sad it's over... keep up the good work.

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by Anonymous11/03/04

The best story on this site

Brilliant writing. simply the best story this site has yet produced. i hope you keep it up! thanks

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by strength+wisdom11/09/04

amazing!

I have been wandering through and contributing to this site for almost 4 years now, but this 5 chapter saga is the best thing I have read here. Bravo to a wonderful story, and I look forward to many more.

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by Captain Midnight11/29/04

One chapter too many?

Other posters may slam me for this. I'll mind, but I'll say my piece. It seemed like the story had reached its climax in Chapter 4, with the two lovers firmly committed to one another. Throwing in the deus ex machina in the form of the super-rich playboy who bankrolls them, apparently for the pleasure of watching them make love, was something I didn't particularly like. I figured the two of them would make it on their own as musicians and as a couple. You may cry all the way to the bank. The first four chapters made up probably the best erotic story of the 70,000 or so posted here.

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I agree - one chapter too many

The last poster said that chapter 5 was unnecessary. I'm inclined to agree. In fact, when I posted Ch. 5, I put a note on my main page warning people to avoid 5 if they could stand it. There's a lot more that I wanted to say about the relationship in part 5, but it's really sort of "next level" relationship stuff, not the juice beginning where all the trust occurs. Also, I couldn't move forward with that last hotel night without explaining what the benefactor was going to do, and really, who cares. I think the rough sex in ch. 5 is my favorite of the series, and it had to escalate through the first 4 to get to that point which means it's not something I could save and use in another story. All in all, I'm very happy with 1-4 and wish I'd done something different with 5 or had the guts to not write it. Eh.

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by Anonymous12/14/04

Spectacular!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Being a bit of a stick in the mud, I have to say that the only thing that detracted from the story was the occasional grammatical and spelling error.

But Holy Fuck!!!!

This has gotta be one of the hottest stories I've read. The inclusion of the fifth chapter nicely rounded things off - the title of Ch. 4 was a bummer: A Romance Ends How it Began...But this made up for it!!!!!!!!!!!

I met my girlfriend (now wife) in a similar situation, though neither of us were overly brilliant at instrumentation. Thank you very much for reminding me of the greatest time of my life.

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by Anonymous12/28/04

GREAT JOB

I've read a lot of stories on this site and this is one of the best of them all. You've been able to make your characters come alive and allow the readers to actually care about what happens to them. This is the essence of great literature, regardless of the genre.
The fact that you write with sensitivity and passion and have a fine eye for detail enhances your work immensely as well. Sylvia would be every guy's dream girl and the sex scenes are terrific, but I remember the little things like Wes thinking that Sarah was pretending to be shy and really wasn't because if she really was shy, she would be much more uncomfortable. This is insight and insight illuminates the human condition and makes reading enjoyable.
You probably didn't need chapter five. It was a little bit like overkill. You could edit more judiciously to enhance your work, but you are certainly talented and I look forward to reading more from you.

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by Anonymous02/21/05

Absolutely unique

SUCH a fantastic piece of literature. The contrast between passion and desire is so well used. Definitely the best story I have ever read on this site. Very well done indeed.

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by Anonymous03/25/05

Great work

I think all of the chapters are great. Wonderful story line I even want to know what happens next. Thanks for such a great story.

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by Anonymous03/26/05

Awesome!! Best story I have ever read!!

This story is so awesome! This is the best story I have ever read. So erotic and yet still believable!! MORE!!

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by Anonymous05/06/05

unbelievable

All five chapters were amazing. It made me unbelievably aroused, and is probably some of the best erotic writing I've read.

Unbelievable. The characterization, detail of the passion in music, and everything else made this so real! I loved it all


Great job!

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by Anonymous05/18/05

I give up!

OK, I'll admit it, when I started posting my stories the tremendous response I recieved made my ego swell a bit. I now stand humbled in the presence of greatness. This series is everything I strive to achieve in my writing. A great story, believable with a foundation of interesting real-life details, rich settings, deep and interesting characters and interesting dialogue. On top of that foundation is a belieavable and fulfilling plot. Wrapping that is a silk robe of exquisite erotic sex that is as tender as it is raunchy.

Oh yeah, and the writing ain't bad either! Well deserving of all the accolades you have recieved. I can't wait to read more.

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by Anonymous05/26/05

Outstanding

The story was wonderful. You really captured the intense joy public performance of music can bring, and the sex was hot as well. Using characters of a college age almost makes one believe they COULD perform this often and vigorously, and the scenes were phenomenal. Thank you. My only complaint relates directly to the quality of the characterization. What happens to these two next? You have actually made me care about them.

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by DOC22611/08/05

OUTSTANDING!!

This review covers the complete story of The Chicago Hotel (CH 1-5). This was the most erotic story I have ever read. The characters were real, and their progression believable. Best of all, the description of the sex was so hot there is a real danger it might contribute significantly to Global Warming if widely read. Don't tell your friends about it; the future of the Earth might well be in danger.

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by Anonymous11/21/05

WOW!!

The greatest story I have every read. Truly remarkable. Stayed up way to late because I had to read the whole thing. Well done.

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by ArthurKing12/19/05

Wow!

I LOVED the story. This seems like it could be every young man's dream, I certainly sat through the whole thing wishing desperately to be Wes. Infact, I've never said this before in my life, but I found the story to be so good that I almost wished that you had toned down the sex and worked more on the plot. Although had this been part of the "Romance" section of the site, I am sure it wouldve gotten fewer hits and reached less of an audience. You're a very talented writer and I look foward to more work. Shibby.

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by Anonymous01/09/06

Brilliant

very few stories that get published are as good as this series, i found this story to be immensly erotic aswell as having solid plot to base the two main characters sexual escapades around

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by Anonymous01/18/06

Heh

Jacksonville 2.5 hours from Miami?

Ever been to Florida?

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by Anonymous02/07/06

Thank you!!!

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by Anonymous03/14/06

Simply Amazing!

i have to say...this ranks as the second best story i have EVER read(and only by a very small margin)...the best part was that no 3rd person(or more) was involved in the sex...just one on one...in one simple word...PERFECT!

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by Anonymous05/20/06

Amazing

All chapters were simply erotic and amazing, you should consider a sequel. You truly have a talent.

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by Anonymous08/01/06

Oh yes!!!!!!!!!!!!

So hot!!!! Mmmmm Thank you!!!!

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by Anonymous08/08/06

awsome

This was THE best erotic story I have ever read... I love the way you intertwine real life complications(shyness, friends....etc.). I really hope you continue their story, perhaps their erotic adventures in Germany??

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by Deaconden09/01/06

Truely great story

Well written, great character development. I never thought I would say this on Literotica, but it could have used less sex, because the characters and plot were so real. I'm glad the story ended on a happy note.

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by Anonymous09/16/06

Awesome

This was a wicked story. Good job. This was one of the best on the site i reckon.

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by Anonymous04/13/07

Highly enjoyable

I have to say, I never believed I would enjoy an erotic story in the way i have with this series. The mix of characters, story and some of the hottest descriptions I've read have lead to more than just an arousing tale, but a highly enjoyable story.

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by Anonymous07/18/07

You succeeded where nearly all fail

You have put sex of the hottest kind, the sort of sex that any sane person would want to experience in their life, inside an optimistic story of life-enhancing love. Yes, there's porn in this text, but the text isn't porn. It's erotic story-telling at its finest, and we end up cheering on your leading man and woman because of the kind of people they are. You are clearly in love with lovers, and I've only seen one other writer on this site who even comes close to what you have achieved here.

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by Anonymous09/28/09

Great series of stories!

What a wonderful series of stories.

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by Anonymous11/26/09

Bravo!

absolutely amazing, if this was published i would definitely buy it. Its in a class of its own compared to any other erotic story iv ever read. you truly have a talent for writing.

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by Anonymous12/30/09

One of the best reads ever!

This was one of the best stories I have read ever. I wish it continued back at campus and then in Germany. You shoild consider writing those chapters. Thanks for the entertainment.

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by Anonymous01/23/10

ugghh so good

i could masturbate while reading this anyday

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by Anonymous01/31/10

WOW

I have NEVER read a series from start to finish. This was my first. This was easily the best story on this website.

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by Anonymous03/16/10

Holy Shit

That was sooooooooooo good. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE a sequel :D

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by Anonymous04/05/10

damn, it. I missed my appointment just reading this entire series .. that good,

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by Anonymous05/22/10

wow!!

one of the best i have read...and i have read a lot

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by Anonymous06/01/10

very hot

much better writing than most. some parts were quite cheesy though... but as a classical music lover (and cello player like sylvia wtf! right?) this was very cute! plus wes is the name of the very good looking actor who was in american beauty hahaha
hope to read more!

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by Anonymous06/07/10

didn't go to bed till 2 am because of you~

Thanks :)

Wonderful story, and man... such descriptive story writing. was horny from start to finish....hope you continue to write

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by HansTrimble10/10/10

A great combination

You provided a pleasing mix of cultural background, exciting events, tenderness, and sex. Interesting venues for the action, too: the tunnel, restroom, swimming pool, sauna, penthouse in front of the fireplace, et al. So much sex that you wore me out just reading about it! But all couched in the love that developed between two shy, lonely people. You also provided an interesting pair of supporting actors in Roger and Faith. If you ever expand this into a novel, fleshing out those two could be interesting. Thank you for several hours of pleasant reading.

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by Anonymous11/20/10

I am begging you!! Don't stop writing this series!!!!! I want to know and read more about Wes and Sylvia's sex life and relationship!!! What happens when they get back to school? Do they fuck in school? Do they have a threesome with a girl? Does Wes start to spank Sylvia? There's so much more you can write about!!! So do it!!! You can't just let this end like this. Although it was a damn good ending (loved the pilots over hearing, it was so hot) but you have to write more because now you have a lot of horny people out there, that need this couple and their love. :) Plz. Write more!!!!

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by Anonymous03/28/11

Wow just...Wow

Lothario, your greatness title is well earned. Lost some sleep because i couldn't stop reading. GREAT WRITING!

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by Anonymous04/21/11

Amazing!!!!!

Simply amazing!!!

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