by opels
This story is off to a wonderful start! Please hurry with more!
this story needs to be published in a novel. its awesome,and u, sir, have a great talent.
Wow, this seems to be following the typical pirate capture the wench and seduce her, but this time the wench is male!
There are paragraphs inserted to explain the female captain, but the physical interactions between the captain and the "wench" were not modified from their original male captain and female wench templates enough.
I mean seriously, playing with a man's chest and not knowing the man's arousal until she slides her hands up his thighs has been keeping me in stitches!
Good read, but just not believable if this story is meant to arouse anything other than laughter.
That poster is obnoxious. See if s/he can write a better story.
I really like the story, whether it can be real or not does not matter to me, it's well written and a good idea for a story.
The only thing that does not sound 'proper', but I may be wrong, is how often a pirate captain would say 'please'. It seems a little too often but I must not forget she is was a very educated lady before turning into a pirate.
Needless to say, I am jumping right at ch. 02. :)