by Belegon
This flows well. I like the way you have put her out
there for us to read with everyday words. Just remember dude, it ain't the fall that kills you.
I like it too. I like the way it opens and the twist it takes. Sensuous and erotic undertones. A five.
sentiments here!
How can I maintain
my tenuous grip
on this gentle sanity
with the promise of you pulling me
towards the edge of the extreme?
Loved this bit!
Syn
this line especially: The fall into you more perilous/than threat of life or limb.
Very nice, Belegon
Flyguy
Playing with abandon at the precipice sounds less dangerous than giving in to her allure.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.
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