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Rumple ForeskinRumple Foreskinabout 19 years ago
It's good to leave the first PC

A very imaginative story. There were passages that read like prose poetry. I'm afraid some mechanical snags (gin for grin) may hurt the score, but the storytelling is first-rate.

Rumple

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
Trinity river

I love the trinity river, where do you live? Texas?

I absolutely loved this story, thank you. I will be keeping my eyes on the sun from now on and watching for nude midnight bathers:)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
Trinity is fit for a Queen

Let a lone a beautiful legend of a river. So much fore thought went into this story. Thank you Art for bringing the level to another high.

Your words dance upon the page. Your story sings to the heart. Your wishes convey that Earth day should be preserved.

Love the story, I give it 100%

L~

AnonymousAnonymousabout 19 years ago
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Art..

this is a beautiful and powerful write. I love the "myth" essence to the story and the connections of woman, man and earth... a wonderful soulful earth day write..

Du Lac~

cloudycloudyabout 19 years ago
Breathtaking Imagery!

This is wonderful, Art! I loved how you wove one of the old stories into this....simply lovely.

evelyn_carrollevelyn_carrollabout 19 years ago
I loved this story

I loved this story. It reminds me of one of Gene Wolfe's best short stories. Couple of typos though!

"Her face slowly rose to soak up the suns (sun's) mesmerizing"

Superb!

cookiejarcookiejarabout 19 years ago
Oh Art...

It was wonderful, you have outdone yourself. Good luck!

Black TulipBlack Tulipabout 19 years ago
Beautiful reading

Always interested in legends and myths, this story gave me some beautiful reading.

Thanks and good luck.

LuciousBi-Writes4ULuciousBi-Writes4Uabout 19 years ago
Great

hope you win this one! :)

story was excellent!

elfin_odalisqueelfin_odalisqueabout 19 years ago
magical.

Rumple was right when he said it read like prose poetry.

A wonderful tale, beautifully told. Thank you.

neonlyteneonlyteabout 19 years ago
Flowing

Congrats Art. This is an excellent tale of power, desire and sacrifice. Needed a little more editing to make it perfect, but finely told for all that.

angelicminxangelicminxabout 19 years ago
Beautiful...

...romantic, heart warming. You have a wonderful imagination and the ability to share it. Thank you! ~Minx

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