by JamesSD
very sexy, a nice one shot story. Keep writing and thanks.
Strong story, very hot. The set up is so believable and natural. I love how the whole situation is actually thought out, there's actually a hesitation, or at least a moment of dilemma. The dialogue during the sex scene is a bit wooden, everyone is a little too up front, as if they are analyzing the situation rather than living it. Holly is a very hot character and I like how Nikki resists giving into her, but for my taste the who blowjob tip thing didn't seem natural. But a good story overall
This story really portrays what it is like to have the
most common threesome, the one-night threesome. The heat, the passion, the initial shyness followed by an all out lustfest. It is a beautiful piece. Please continue to make more.
Well written, very human and sensative.
Love to see more
from page one:
"Holly moved between my legs and grasped my shaft with purpose. Her eyes remained fixed on my cock as she slowly pumped up and down it, getting a feel for its girth and length.
"I've had one this long before, but never so thick." She said,"
in the logic of the story, I think that's Nikki, right?
Otherwise, one fucking hot story. Loved it.