All Comments on 'A Fissure in the Ice'

A very fine piece of writing.

In a single page the authour drew a complete picture of someone's life, character and emotions.

A fine piece of work.

Well done!

Well done piece of writing. I hope we see many more from you!

I can only echo the comments already made by others. A wonderful exploration of the self.

Bravo!

description of a rather strange reaction to what seemed to be a normal invitation. Your description of the lady masturbating, if that was what it was, seemed rather Victorian. Not my cup of tea.

Lyrical, sensual and sexy - what more can you ask for?

Bravo! This is the kind of story any author would be proud to write.

Wonderful job of capturing the person, her motives and the heat behind her actions without resorting to graphic description. This is not a 'stroke story', it's beautifully written erotica.

This was a beautifully crafted, finely sketched piece. Such haunting, mysterious, ghostly images painted here, the awakening of a tortured soul. Subtly erotic, the words themselves are the sensuous stroking in this story. Thanks for the opportunity to read it, I was enthralled. Good luck in the contest!

Atmoshperic, lyrical and poetic. I can't write that way but you do it well. This was definitely a different breed of erotica (from mine anyway), all about sex and identity but containing little in the way of a "sex act." Very nicely done.

very polished, professional, and solidly written. You can be proud of this!

It was very erotic and your descriptions were incredible. Great work :)

painting. Very poetic use of the language. I enjoyed reading your story.

Good luck.

Black Tulip

But strangely cold, and devoid of emotion. Or was that intentional? In the end, I don't think her ice cracked at all, did it.

I suppose it's not easy writing an erotic story with just one character. The depth and subtlety you gave her character was appreciated, and it went far beyond what we usually see on Lit. I just wish we could have seen her interaction with her quondam lover at the party. *That* would have been fascinating.

Good job, though. Very erotic and inventive. It's good to see someone stretching the bounds. Look forward to seeing more of your stuff.

What an intriquing first sentence. The story that follows does not disappoint. Intriguing, fascinating in its psychology, and beautifully written, this is a stylish and thoughtful piece.

It was written beautifully ~ very poetic.

~Honey

That was no mere story. That was a work of art. I've never thought of writing as art before, but you made the comparison undeniable. I think your talents may be wasted here. All the same, good luck with the contest.

This was unbelievably gorgeous. Such detail, such description... such a talent for painting pictures with words is born, not developed.

As you develop the talent it will create the precise feelings you wish in your readers, it will envelop them in the scene and lust.

Thank you for sharing this story.

I will you well in the future.

Hello again, After reading "The Seventh Snowfall" I looked for more of your work, I'm hooked. You truly have a gift.

H.P.L.

You're the only writer on Lit on whose stories I really don't know what comment to leave. It seems like whatever I write will not be enough.

but also conjure up

thoughts and feelings

out of thin air...

seducing me away

from this world

into a nothingness;

you are verily a

powerful sorceress!

I got caught up in your visual descriptions and had to stop several times to let my imagination cool down, then go back and reread to see what I'd missed . . .

Loved the understated note at the end. :)

Wow !!!