by pagrl
That was a great story, especially for a first submission. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Good reading. It was very funny and a good reason to never simply assume anything. Maybe the nigger security guard knocked her up as well?
Congrats on your first story. It was funny and sexy. Keep writing and don't let a-hole comments like Don's hold you back. He's still mad that he had to move to the back of the bus. :)
Besides, I don't see him writing anything.
It's nice to see it up here. I can't wait to see more of your work. /ed. Rickyboxen
Great work! I am so glad you asked for my feedback. The story and people are believable. Can't wait to see what you do next...
Liked the story very much...erotic and fun. One flaw though...Terrance had brown eyes at the start and green eyes later on. Otherwise great first attempt.
I loved the intensity, good luck with writing more stories - you have a nice style! rmaitland