by BadBuzzard
... but this story is complete rubbish. There's nothing believable about the characters, the situation or the sex.
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You write "I couldn't believe my eyes or ears..."
Unfortunately, neither can I.
I thought it was hot as hell....I am dripping still....more, more.....
Sorry but no guy would suck on another guy if there were two other naked woman in the room.
Although some of the English itself wasn't bad, the story was just too unbelievable to be sexy. Need some lead up rather than just diving into sex like that.
Oh, and ignore the comment about a man not sucking another man's cock. Whoever left that comment is just a homophobe!
I gotta say that was pretty hot until he started sucking the other guy off. What was that all about, nobody wants to hear that. Although its not very believable at all, the rest of the story is still hot, just get rid of the gay stuff!
The lead-up to this makes it difficult to get into. The idea of a teacher asking to bang a couple of parents without any other lead-up was hard to get through. The ideas for the sex action were good, but the descriptions needed more punch.
Too many nitpicking comments. Can you take any article here seriously? Made my dick hard reading so it scores high.
jeez, folks. it's a hypnotism story; isn't that obvious?
It's OBVIOUS that you're neither "picky", nor educated. This pathetic excuse for a story is FULL of misspellings, grammar errors, and is silly to boot.
Leave writing to writers, or at least to educated people.
I really got hard and loved that story but the problem was that the POV kept changing between Debbie and John. Choose one character to keep as the narrator and it should be sizzling
So many stories only have the women being bisexual. Liked how you have both the women and men playing together. Makes a foursome more interesting