by Moonlight_
Good story, I like the more erotic language used, versus the normal pornographic language style. Don't get me wrong, I like crude language too, but your more poetic turn of language was a really nice change. I hope to see more of your work!
At long last, someone who understands the use of language and specific, visionary words. One can clearly see, hear and feel the emotions of the two in how you've woven this story. You should be writing more on this, or writing another story. Thanks for sharing your talents.