by MsIndustry
as bad as it can get. if I wanna watch clockwork orange, I go and rent the movie
Don't Write, if your writing is nothing more than a collection of poor examples of dominance bordering on rape in what seems to be the aftermath of a more romantic affair.
Lot's of trite scenes from a lot of better done but similar stories.
It was not bad and you should not quit writing! I liked it. Thanks for sharing.
It was really well done, lots of detail, just needs to be a little longer. Can't wait to see more.
but it is certainly not the worst. Write on.
You just need more detail, thoughts, emotions. But good first try
I thought you did a fantastic job. It certainly turned me on. I hope you will write another one and tell us what happens with penny and Jamie...Thanks for a great story. keep up the good work.
i think if this is your first story it was great one! It certainly turned me on and i thought the ending was cute! =] Great balance between dominance and romance