by livin4noone
you refer in the story to her having short hair but in the pictures she has short hair, otherwise quite a good first effort
This '75' could have easily have been a '100' if she had gotten preggie!
So-so. It's got a premise, but no character development. "One day she was talking to one of her older friends who told her about masturbation. She didn't fully understand it until she started to watch porn. Slowly her sex drive grew. By the time she was 18 she was a chronic masturbator." So what? Bring us along, how did she get in the conversation with an older friend? Did she walk up to her on the street and say "do you masturbate?"; where did she see the porn, alone - with someone - did she masturbate there? Hey, it's got possibilities, but ya gotta develop them
Nice sex scene. Try to work on a story next time. Something needs to change: a new problem, a new situation.
Read about it in Literotica, the advice section or google for writers. Good luck.
Beautiful picture of a delectible female. Story never seemed to get off the ground.
Ok for a start, girl needs to be hearded into bdsm, would make a good slave
Just a little bit too quick to come. Need more time.
finally! a literotica entry without a 50 year old chubby woman for the “hot” pictures! thank you!