All Comments on 'Ku Klux Grandpa'

This quite a strong poem, both in terms of its construction and in how it speaks to the reader.

Some excellent imagery here, such as the first stanza:

It hit me like a six ton truck,

breaking my voice and piercing my heart,

tasting of watered shampoo

Would cut out the line 'His brick heart turns to putty'

which sounds a bit cliched, imho

The Italian stanza sounds out of place, too

Good stuff, mentioned in today's new poem reviews

images created in this poem. I think you've really got something here, but towards the end it changed. Maybe a little light editing and you've got a winner. Thanks.

I absolutely loved this poem. It showed almost a soft side of something considered so evil. The betrayal and shame felt by the granddaughter is heart breaking. Thank you for submitting this.

High Point:

tasting of watered shampoo.

(never heard it described that way)

Low point:

VD covered those-

score bumped up because it is something different