i mentioned this poem in the new poem review thread in the poetry forum - wildsweetone
This is interesting to look at. Cool. Perlin? I think you need purlin.
The fingers image put on top of the visual which is an image in and of itself here, was stretching it a bit too much for my imagination. Ditto, for the struggle of light and dark. Ths really looks like a structure in a process of construction. What was intriguing was the use of space for the poem and the picture itself. I would have tried another poem with the same image -but with stronger loyalty to the visual qualities of the image this time.
building, medical and ties. TK U MLJ LV NV
This is a very interesting presentation. Nice work.
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