by ellynei
I honestly wish I had something negative to say about this story but I don't. The nature and reactions of the rapist and his "victim" earn an internal chuckle which would have been external if I hadn't been so disturbed by my own excitement by the dark thoughts and actions of the rapist and the victim's reaction to it, as well as the sheer irony of the rapist falling for his victim. Beyond twisted! Just don't let it get hokey, keep whatever happens between the character as dark and disturbing as the plot. Don't hold back hold back this time, loosen the leash on the characters and let 'er rip! I can't believe I writing this. *smirk*
The way the rapist was going back and forth between some normalcy and his dark side was very clever and exciting. Rich descriptions and good dialogue added to my enjoyment of this story. Looking forward to the next part.
I love the premise of this story and the delicate psychological descriptions of your characters!! Hoping for more chapters soon!
The storyline was good. The psychological profile of the characters was even better. Nice build-up and transition between the so-called 'game' and realism. There were a few technical errors, but I was able to get past it easily. Will PM you when I can. Much luck to you and your next piece.
but great depth of characters! Love your story-telling if a little disturbed!
I'm suddenly considering myself very lucky at finding this story. I've never come across a story where an attacker starts feeling for his victim, even without him knowing. And don't laugh, but I see myself in this girl. Same basic appearance, same ideas about fantasies, same silly naivete. Hmm, maybe that's why I've enjoyed this chapter so much! And kudos for not falling into typical lit storyline where the girl just all of a sudden gives in, like she's not being raped. I could kiss you. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
This story was seriously amazing!!! That girl IS me! Exact appearance, exact same desires of play-rape... I can't wait to read the next chapters!
I loved how dark and disturbed the rapist is; don't change him! Keep it dark and twisted. This is superb writing.
Wonderfully written. loved the depth of the characters and the whole vibe. This is one of the top 5 stories I've read on here...and I've read a lot of them! I look forward to more!
This is a story I could read over and over and never stop cumming while I'm doing it. You're an artist.
It's been way too long since I've gotten wet while reading a story! Ronald is perfect! <3
Please continue on with this by his keeping her in a cellar in a rented house. Cage her, chain her, tie her, fuck her, humiliate her, video tape her, train her, make some money selling her to other men, and then continue her usage again and again!
I really enjoyed it. . Though I don't want him to really hurt her much.
I liked it all, the dark abuse included. I'm glad you kept writing!