All Comments on 'The Initiation'

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davion2308davion2308almost 16 years ago
Not bad

Not a bad little story. It was a solid, quick read. I would prefer more imagery about them stripping down and being naked in a store, but otherwise decent. It did feel a little rushed, like you were trying to type quickly and you omitted some build-up and story.

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