by Beautifullittlebaby
i think the concept of your story is good, and you have some very hot elements. it just seems to happen very quickly, without any buildup - i would love to read more when you took your time a bit more and drew out the story.
As much as i'm not that into anal, this story turned me on very much and i had a big orgasm and was very wet after. Keep writing these stories. You are great at it.