All Comments on 'Awakening'

Havent read any of your other stories but hopefully they make more sense than this one. You desperately need an editor and proof reader. The story is garbled and confused. The charcaters meaningless. One just doesnt know who is who and who is doing what. By the way is Chay a cyclops with only one grey eye. Really not a good submission. Sorry

Why apologise for not liking something/ If they didn't like it just leave it at that. I really liked your story. Although with a little more work it could've been a lot better it still manages to capture how much we can be hurt by someone and then how hard it is to trust someone else with that love again. Good work, keep at it.

Perhaps more could have been done with it, but it's incredibly moving as it is written. I hope to see more of your work soon, best of luck.