by lonie69
I really did enjoy it! it's got serious potential to be a really great story! However, I wish they were a bit longer so far ur two chapters have been very short and i just want more, more, more! Also, I would suggest an editor but that doesnt change the fact that its great and i am looking forward to the next chapter! :-)
Hi all,
I know the first 2 were a bit short, but i'm submitted the next chapter and it's a fair bit longer. hope everyone is enjoying the stories
I found this small portion to be a bit more riveting. Glad we got Jeremy's POW too. I was cheering him on when he beat the crap out of Cal hehe.