All Comments on 'Honey Bun Ch. 01'

That was a great first chapter. I hope to read more soon.

dont take a shortish story and split it into four parts to create a serial. That has killed this story for me.the first chapter does'nt even come into any category.

be smarter than most writer the only direction this can go is for her to move out there is no way in hell she would ever get close to her brother you have already set things down so you can't change them human nature would not allow her to forgive him or for her to start liking him if you are like most writers and think your story needs a little forced sex or rape (which i hate and is never needed in any story) put it in the nonconsent area where it belongs if you try to get them together put it in the fantacy area that is the only way they would ever get together is in a fantacy be sure to keep your stories realistic and believable

I enjoyed reading this story, i'm not used to seeing actual plot building on this site, so great job. keep writing these stories