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UM... turning into a JPB story
I Guess it is Just me BUT I dont see how " training her" to be a submissive changes what she did for the relatively short period they have been married
21 men and another woman over the course of several years is hard to over look.
a bit short
I like the chapters a bit longer. Writing is fluent. Not sure about the storyline though. I'll wait and see for final opinion.
May be, maybe not
I don't think I'll last to the end of this. Reading snippets doesn't do much for me. This storyline is already getting a bit tedious. Certainly not the quality of "Tank's Farewell".
Still on track,
yes this part was quite short. I hope to get longer bits once the action starts. Keep it up!
loving it so far
glad it's going to be a long one
How Does She Go
From being a cold hearted bitch who doesn't even want him to touch her cause she loves Mark, than 30 minutes later doing anything he says? I must have missed something, this seems more sci-fi than anything. Why was she fucking all these guys and how could he have not known? Why would he want her at all?
got stupid
the story got very stupid.
Nothing very erotic here.
It looks like the author could have done it with three chapters.
I am only here because I ususally like the author's romance or loving wife tales. But he does like multiple partner marraige and if I had known.....
HOT-HOT-HOT
WOW, I'm hooked! To the naysayers: It is a S-T-O-R-Y!
Okay! Lets see where this goes
On to the next chapter!
Im hooked,
line and sinker.
I am loving this story
And can't wait to see where it will go..
this is
how you show that your man
Loved It!
It was very good. I'm so glad you had Kaye get back together with them.
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