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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
from the perspective of an amateur omeglist...

I liked the fluidity of this one. You also did very well to keep the characterization consistent between both.

Remember, if you're going to make the readers go along with the whole "climax" of the piece, you should find a way to bring that part out a bit. her ending seemed a bit rushed, IMHO.

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good talking with ya. :)

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