All Comments on 'Revenge of the Nerd Ch. 20'

As usual, a good chapter and she is actually becoming quite an interesting character, as is he. However, their was not a lot of substance in this particular chapter, perhaps more of a lead into the next one.

Why is it, that when I reach the end of a page, I've got to wait for a new submission instead of clicking "next".

I hope I can read the next page soon.

Kind regards naughtyboy

You can check my progress at my website listed in my profile.

I try to end chapters where there is a natural, reasonable change in content to the next chapter. That makes some of them short.

When I submit a chapter to Literotica, I post it on my site, so you can read ahead as well as follow the progress in The Latest News.

I'm amazed and delighted that the "it's too short" nags are good-natured and suggest you will forgive me if I keep it coming. I plan to.

Not that I would tease anyone, but chapter 21 covers the gifts Ashley was planning and those she receives.

Her personality is maturing smoothly and the background is beoming more

detailed. What would those who feel that the chapter too short have thought of three seven page chapters?

his age group and all...

"I hadn't been in my comfort zone since I met him. I think I was being rewarded by being happier than I had ever been. But he made me work awfully damn hard for it."

You have a knack for letting the reader get ahead of the characters. When they have moments of keen insight we feel relieved because we'd got there first and were hoping they'd catch on. That's pretty hard to do in a first-person narrative.

Damn; you're good!

Greatest story on literotica u made like romance stories now I just keep reading. I stay away from long stories like these but I can't stay away from this one great job guy or girl!

Last paragraph, the two line one was great!

moment of brilliance in the last chapter, then humdrum