All Comments on 'Keeping It Close Ch. 01'

Basically good story, but the many grammar, spelling and syntax errors mar a good read.....

Continue the story...you left lots of questions to be answered and opportunities to be had!! LOL....

this reads like it should be chapter two not one. you give no back ground as to why he put the camera in the parents room or how he did it. you also give no info as to his relationship with his sister. go back and get a good editor and do a rewrite with some back ground. then you can continue other wise you will have a half assed story that isn't worth reading.

DBRS

Please and thanks

liked it; wish there was more--like a ch 2, 3, 4, 5 etc.

Todd and sister; Todd and parents ( both) and sister and parents ( both) all 4 etc.