All Comments on 'After Christmas Island'

I'm not sure 100

.......history of desperate people seeking sanctuary and a better life. So much loss and pain.

Vivid image of bereavement. Well done.

Tess

and retain a meaning. The shape is like an ending, or the grave. I never thought of pointing a poem like so, like pointing to death, or whatever the mind makes of it.

but did you go beyond the image? I wasn't sure.

I'm not sure it needs to be a 'concrete' poem the words are enough for my 5

the visual form speaks to me of the howl rising and spreading up from the point of the woman and into the sky to the gods

having said that, i wonder if paring this back further might help ... do you think it would lose to much, v, if you removed

all forced blank

finally restrained by her cousins

and moved 'she falls to her knees' to precede 'above her daughter's coffin'?

the long narrow house is just that, long and narrow. The poem is devastatingly sad.