All Comments on 'At the Commander's Disposal Ch. 00'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Mmmmm! So hot!

Can't wait to read more!

virgochildvirgochildabout 13 years ago
yeeeesssssss!

keep them coming, I am loving this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
FREAK!

This story has my little heart palpitating and fluttering. ;-)

Very sexy! 5 Stars!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Painful...

I mean, really! It's fucking painful with the grammar and punctuation!

I tried to get into it but can't. Try putting it in Word and grammar check it!

Sorry!

Alpha_MarmAlpha_Marmalmost 12 years ago
A good strong vibe...indeed

Honey-

Once you get through the grammar minefield it takes off. Get an editor. This tale has potential because it snags and twists you up in the imagery and powerful sexual chemsitry between the man and the woman.

The sheer primal power of rutting sexuality speaks volumes. 5 star content to be sure.

AMHJ89AMHJ89over 10 years ago

That was deliciously sexy and I wanted to o take her place in that scene

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago

I agree with Alpha. I love the characters and descriptions, etc. Will be checking for the next chapter!

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