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by tazz31706/20/11

THE BEACH BOYS

INSTEAD OF A TBIRD, HE SHOULD TAKE THE CUCUMBER AWAY AND REDEFINE THEIR RELATIONSHIP. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous06/20/11

Why are these people married?
The bitch wife cares nothing for her cuckboy. Only sad braindead little cucks will enjoy this pathetic story.

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by Anonymous06/20/11

another person

another person who writes to piss people off, they give no information on their bio because they know how sick there are.

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by Anonymous06/20/11

Yep, writes just to piss people off.

No sane person would write such crap unless 1) they are seriously sick themselves, or 2) just wants to piss people off. Well, maybe there is a 3): 3) is sick AND writes to piss people off.

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by BobNbobbi06/20/11

No comment . . .

. . . on the behavior that sounds very '60's, just on the two narrator technique. I thought you carried it well for the first two thirds of the story. It helped you build and maintain a sense of pace and movement, maybe flow is a better term here, but I think you gave up on the sense of movement when momma was off in the dark corner doing the sex dance with stranger. Since the story makes clear that hubby watched the back and forth would fit here too.

In the whole a well told tale, lots told and lots left to the imagination of readers.

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by Anonymous06/21/11

nice read

Great tale and well written. Would enjoy another chapter.

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