All Comments on 'Jacqueline Learns to Relax'

by Jemma_Jane

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Masseuse vs. masseur

Please note the difference: "masseuse" is female, and "masseur" is male. "Man masseuse" is meaningless - it's as silly as saying "male actress".

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Excellent

There are not many good writers on this site. Even fewer can hold the interest through the sex (think fast forwarding bad porn). I look forward to your next submission.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
"Jacqueline, do you want to..."

"Do you want to suck my cock right now?"

Whoa! What did I miss? Who is this guy? Women pay to suck his cock? What kind of a place is this? I'm sorry, but good writing is more than just stringing words together coherently. The story has to work. Has to make sense at some level. I kept waiting for Jacqueline's dream to end. Not that that would have been creative--just understandable.

justme713justme713over 12 years ago
fun story!!

Your story was a fun read for me!

I had no problem with your story at all. Enjoyed the fantasy!!

Thanks for Sharing!!! I look forward to your next submission!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
nicely written story!

A very nicely written little fantasy piece. Good dirty fun!

Scotsman69Scotsman69over 12 years ago
A most delicious and arousing story.

Jesus woman, you are very good. Mostly superb writing. Thank you. Five stars.

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