Mom's Red Bikini Ch. 03

Love it

I love this series. Keep writing!

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I do so Love happy endings. 8)

Time to get the suster involved.!!!

Another groaner

"I have some good porno films". You're a regular casanova.

I like it!

Please can I Have Mom's address!

Its good add hid sister and let him keep both of them as his sex slave and naked when his father is not around.

I'm glad that he showed his mother that he could fuck her to where she couldn't take any more.

Mom may need to start exercising to get the stamina to keep up with her stud of a son in the bedroom.

I like that mom is willing to be his lover, and I hope that he can get his mom to fuck him every day.

A really hot scenerio that was written very graphically and erotic.

Thanks for the read.

Grammar and punctuation

The penultimate 'your' in;

""Your getting hard again," Mom said, moving the warm cloth over my crotch."

needs to be a 'you're', as it is a contraction of 'you are'. This sort of error is disruptive and throws me out of the story.

Grammar snob

Whenever I see an upset grammar snob, I like to pat them on the head and say "there they're their, its going to be ok"

MORE!

Since mom knows he is fucking his sister, they need to have a three-way! He sounds stud enough to take care of both women, and just maybe the two women would enjoy each other as well.

As good as the others

A fitting end to this 3 parter, hard fast and stroke reads all through

Mom's Red Bikini Ch. 03

For a story to have any chance of being good, it must be more thorough, more details and descriptions, and certainly more than fucking for the sake of fucking: In, out, and done!!! Just like that. This story is more like fucking an ugly whore where he just wants to get his jollies, and move to his next chore of the day.