All Comments on 'Kairi Ch. 01'

Good start! More please.

really nice start, can't wait to read more from this story.

OK start. Good descriptions and story line so far.

Grammar is pretty good, only a few choppy sentences. Pay close attention to your past and present tense, and if the sentence sounds complete or could use another descriptive word like "very".

Also, think of different ways you could word your sentences to sound more fluid.

Example: (Your Sentence) "I'm starting realize why my male co-workers never get anything done, and I blush shyly." (Other) "Blushing shyly, I now realize why my male co-workers never seem to get anything done."

Overall, your story has potential and I hope you continue.

LadyTiger

I'll be looking for the next chapter :)

Such a teaser! You've got a really good start and I can't wait to read more.

I loved it. My favorite story on Audiobooks is Missy The Werecat about a woman who got lost in the woods was bitten by a Werecat, and spent the next two years as a cat before she shifted back to human form.