by VeronicaLesley
Interesting start, although the offer to play for the stranger seemed too quick.
Five.
I really enjoyed this first chapter . I can't wait to read more .
I don't know what's happening right now, but it seems that authors on Lit want to go for this one page, barely there kind of story installment. I'm not crazy about it, because you don't really get a chance to become involved with the characters before they're gone. Rather than a half hour show, I feel as though I just watched a commercial. I don't really care if it ever comes on again. I just want to get back to the show or, in this case, a story with actual meat. Intriguing, well written start. Just make it longer.
Lmao I loved this... You need a good fucking.. lol priceless !!!!
I love alpha males who goes after what they want. Very promising.
I'd like to thank all of you for your comments. I will take into consideration the length of the stories. The characters will develop more depth as the story progresses. It's just getting started. There is more to come. :) I am still working on the second installment so hang in there.
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Veronica Lesley
Nice lol but its been forever since you've updated..kinda a downer....
Should I give up waiting? Have you joined the masses of authors who don't finish what they start?
Why did you bother submitting this? It is a great start, but when will there be more?
Wow...Um...Well....
Yeah, I haven't followed up with this story in forever! It's been almost a year. I feel to terrible for not continuing it. To be honest, I've always had the second chapter but I changed so many times that I got frustrated and quit. Then I started looking for an editor but no one replied. :P
No promises but if everything goes well, I'll be submitting the second part by Friday.
Thank you all for taking the time to read my story!
This is just the beginning. Good start. I'm reading a lot chemistry between those too. Bad boy with mystery to him who is obsess with sexually frustrated talented young lady.