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The New Kid Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Heifel07/15/12

A really good start:-)

Keep it coming.. I'm allready wondering what happens next. Good work;-)

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by Anonymous07/15/12

Good start

I really like how you started the story so I hope you continue. I would like to see how things progress.

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by avidreadr07/15/12

Good beginning. I prefer stories where you get to know the characters. I like Kyle and can relate somewhat to the shyness. I look forward to reading more and, maybe, learning more about Hanson.

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by Anonymous07/15/12

I'm toung-tied

I have very occasionally been paid to do minor editing and proof reading by professional writers.

Just keep it up. You don't need my help.

I am looking forward to more of your story{s}.

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by musicfreak07/15/12

Thanks

Thanks for the nice comments. I really appreciate them. The story is complete and the following chapters are pending approval. Should be up in a few days. Thanks.

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by Anonymous07/15/12

Nice

Thia actually sounds autobiographic and sincere......which is good.

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by Anonymous07/15/12

hi gr8 story dude....whn we r getting the nxt chap...cant wait....

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by cannd07/16/12

I am not trying to be a bitch, but the person who said they get paid to do editing spelled tongue wrong :) I think you could benefit from an editor. People are happy to volunteer to do it. The best writers who are published on this site have more than one usually, along with beta readers or someone who reads it and gives overall opinions and comments as opposed to correcting spelling and grammar. I think you could benefit from cleaning it up a bit b/c it is a good start to a story. I think you did a great job of starting to develop the character which many authors aren't able to do. Look forward to more.

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by musicfreak07/16/12

Author's Note

For those asking the next chap is up. It's 1 chap per day so yeah just check back everyday and it should be up by then, or you could just wait until they are all up and read them altogether. As for an editor, I'll probably go with 1 on future stories. Thanks for the feedback guys. It's really encouraging since this is my first story after all. Thanks again.

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by angelx60207/16/12

Really looking forward to reading more when they get posted. I really like where this is going so far.

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by Anonymous07/16/12

Great start!

Can't wait for more!

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by metajinx07/16/12

There were a few fact repetitions in the beginning of your story, and you didn't always have the tenses right. It took a bit of effort to read over those (even for me, who doesn't speak English regularly), so you could work on that a bit. Other than those small glitches it was a good start :)

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by cjl499107/18/12

Details

Thank you for being amongst the first authors I've read on this site to actually explain the characters! Please keep doing it. It made this chapter perfect!

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great start to what looks to be a very good story.?

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by lonesomedove6607/22/12

Good start

I like where this is going and great effort in getting us too know the character's too, onto the next one...

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by modernreader07/23/12

Good beginning

I like a story with a plot and some exposition. Keep it up.

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by hotlover6908/20/12

great start

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