So cold, so clinical, so lacking in erotic content.
There's not a lot wrong with the writing, but the story itself isn't delivered very well, I'm afraid. It ends up reading more like a shopping list than an erotic tale.
In the story the wife tells her husband how perfect her lovers were. How long before she realizes how imperfect the sap she married is, I mean he cums in his pants when she tells him about fucking a friend. How long before all the shared laughter with her husband changes to become laughter at her husband. How long before the time spent with others to feed her husband's depravities becomes time spent with others for her own pleasure with no concern for her husband. How long before she realizes that she can have one of those perfect lovers her husband pushed her to, and leave the poor excuse she's married to behind.
How can you love someone you don't respect and how can you respect someone who whores you out to feed his own depravity and weakness.
These 'authors?' that write stories glorifying the wimp don't seem to want to include the chapter where he finally realizes how pathetic he really is and how everyone he knows are really laughing at him behind his back. The chapter where the wife finally realizes how much better she can do and how much better all of her lovers are as breeding material. The chapter where the husband realizes his real value to the human race and wins a 'Darwin Award'.
No these 'authors?' don't write of the pain and destruction that actually turning these cuckold fantasies into reality lead to. They're too busy wanking off at the idea of their own wives cheating on them.
Show of hands! How many have actually ever cum in their pants without touching it or anybody else touching it? All these willing cuck stories have a guy cum in his pants with no stimulation. I have never had that happen to me under any circumstances and their have a whole lot of circumstances. None of my friends that I've asked have ever done that either! I guess it's possible but I'm not sure about that! You'd probably have to be pretty fucked in the head for that to happen! Especially when it only happens if some guy is fucking your wife. I'd say that makes that person a little sick in the head! 1*
For the wimp willing cuckolds maybe. Just another mindless willing cuckold story, nothing new. Same crap posted daily by the wimp ass cuckold writers. I guess they do have their followers so let them wallow in their own perverted sick minds. The anonymous below said it all. Very acute observation of the lifestyle. 1* for effort.
But the comment has validity to the whole cuck theme. Well written and a miniscula of a different angle for which I commend the author. 4*
I guess authors don't enjoy being panned on the brink of the weekend - especially those naughty fantasising married ones that probably write the bulk of these wife-sharing tales.
If their wives only knew!
But I was expecting some pilfering offerings from the fucked-up cucked and lonely broken misogynists like Huedogg or Cantgetany to make a contribution at least. What happened to chapter 2 'dogg? I mean if you're outta crack or something.....?
you write for your own pleasure because as far as i'm concerned your just a sick fuck and as far being anonymous who in their right mind would want you to have access to any part of their life. You give your feelings in your stories i give mine in my comments which leads me to the earlier conculsion you are a sick fuck.
Bravo. Well spoken description of these mundane idiotic stories. Your comment was far better reading than the story,
let em know you will pick her up in 12 to 18 months if she test negative and leave her forever
Women that menally ill need help
...but I submitted this story in a different category so as to not have to burden the sophisticates and highbrows. Clearly, I've been doing this long enough to know what kind of reaction a story like this gets in LW. I might repost it, maybe Group, or Fetish.
But what an entertaining bunch! I especially like the name calling, that's a hoot. Oh, yeah? You're a bigger one. I can't believe that with that title and tag line you all read it! Do you read every story without looking? How many times do you put your hand on the hot stove before learning it burns?
The those of you who left thoughtful and insightful comments on either the writing or the story, thank you. Especially if you used your member name. And for those of you who are dismayed that the story didn't include a horrible marriage breakup, loss of love, betrayal, isolation and loneliness... Really? That's the story you want to read?
Oh, yeah, one more thing. Read the one from the guy who objects to the proposition that a guy can cum in his pants. No, serious, read it. He asked his friends. How'd that conversation go? Hmm... Maybe there's a story there.... But rest assured I would submit it to another group.
Thanks for reading, everyone. It was not my intention to inflame the anons. But you take your fun where you find it. Glad everyone had an outlet for their frustration.
Not exactly a "copy & paste" three times, but not too far away, either. Thank goodness for the friend/pimp providing a 'little something' different. Is Sweetie Spanish/Italian Maria or French Marie? Or did I miss Hubby calling her one name and Bull Pimp calling her the other?
Competently written, but too repetitious ... especially since the three cream-donors were not very well-developed (except their throat-swabs)!
That would matter. UGH!!!!!!!
That's probably because there's nothing "normal" about you.
1* for being retarded.
This interesting thing about this story is the understated way it is presented as a mere recounting by the wife of her recent sex-capade. Much like a woman recounting how her recent shopping trip or golf game went. That was very interesting and a novel literary artifice on how to present the typical suck-fuck scenes. Also, the joyous way her sexual experience fullfilled both the husband's and wife's fantasies and desires showed that it was clearly a joint venture. Thanks for some good writing!
Glad to see from the author's comment that he-or is it she-has a sense of humor because some of those critical comments are really funny.
Or would be if they were not so ridiculous.
There is something so forbidden about seeing your wife, the mother of your children, pulling down a strange man's boxers just to stuff her mouth with his inevitably thicker and larger cock that definitely makes a number of otherwise normal men either rant and rave or, yes, just about cum in our pants.
You he-men shouldn't complain too much, many of our wives work out extra hard to keep in shape. Who knows? Be a gentleman, have an attractive online profile, wait until she is on her knees, hopefully naked, and you can show us wimps just how much of a man you are.
I guess the writers name says it all...toomuchinmyhead....gotta get the shit out somehow, but why the fuck are you making us suffer too?
. . . dirty, nasty, no holds barred sucking sex with no rhyme or reason why; just do it now! For a quick vignette, this one hit the spot. Good job, author.
Your writing prowess far exceeds any of theirs. And their lives are so sad. All they have to occupy their lives are their daily forays to the LW section of Lit, where they torture themselves with stories they claim to hate, and bitch about said stories.
The material is too raw for my tastes, but comments shouldn't be about content but rather competency. You are far more competent than any of the "BTB" authors that get raves here. Well done.
Who held the gun to your head and forced you to pull up this site and read this story? Don't like a story? Either specify your complaints and move on or write your own damn story.
If it's shit I'll call it shit. The writer, not author, writer, of this story allows anonymous comments. If he doesn't want comments from anons the writer will turn them off.
And by the way, this IS shit.
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