by liebetooyoo
He should, at least, get mom in the ass and pussy and then have a threesome with his mom and sister. There is a lot more you can do with this story before you quit. Please continue it.
I'm assume the question mark at the end means you might pick the story back up later. Which you should cause it is great
You had a good story going but then you had to go and ruin it by adding the mother. If you would have stayed with just him and his sister I would have been interested in reading more. But since you had to go and add his mother to the story I'm not interested in reading any more of this story. To many writes start out with a good or great story but then goes and ruining it. I'm sorry you had followed them. You had promise but then you go and ruin it.
you can't end it like that, as brilliant as all of it was... you need to have the anal between mother and son, with a deep creampie
More chapters please. I love face sitting and I wish my mum and sister had done it me when I growing up. There are so many more places you could go with this story, so please continue.
Don't you dare discontinue this series.... It is going to be a calamity of the highest order if you do.... Please please please continue with the new installments.....
Great series thus far. Ignore the fool who said it was ruined. It's your tale and we'll keep following the characters along. Looking forward to more adventures!
I will probably continue this series. I never expected so many people to like it.
I wrote this on a whim and as such I wandered a bit from what I originally wanted. So I think next chapters(...?) will be more focused.
Sadly real life impedes writing, so please be patient. Though I have other stories nearly finished.
Thank you for all your feedback.
I usually don't find Incest/Taboo stories very interesting, but your style captured me immediately when I read Chapter 01. Now I can't wait to read more of this series. I certainly hope you return to this story and write additional chapters. Unlike one negative comment, I think your inclusion of the mother added another dimension to the story although I would have introduced her inclusion as a result of her overhearing the sexual excapades of her children in the motel room as it did seem a little inconsistent that the mother could not have heard the sexual coupling going on in the very same room. After all, mothers seem to always have one ear open when it comes to their children. Regardless, I think adding her to the story really adds to it and I hope you continue with her in a sexual role.
All in all, I like your writing and hope to read more of your work. Kudos!!
To answer oldauthor.
The mother did hear them at it in the hotel room, that was why she was so horny in the car. Obviously I failed to explain this properly. A common writer's affliction is to forget that the reader can't read your mind.
To answer the other dude. The father won't be joining in. I am not a fan of stories with both father and son in the deal. Too weird.
Not into brother and sister stuff normally but the introduction of mother got me. Like the way it is going and please continue. I understood about mother hearing in the hotel, it was subtle but there. Well done
hey just got done rereading it and it is one of my favorite stories I've ever read the series is quite exceptional dynamite work please consider more chapters
You have got to continue this story PLEASE :). This was the best I have read in 2 years!!!
Please do not add the father it always ruins the love side of the story if I was in love with my sister and we had sex I wouldn't want anyone else to have sex with her apart from me especially if I took her virginity but the mother having sex with the father is fine I would like to read a few paragraphs of that mabie the mothers new hornyness could help re kindle there sex life leaving the son more time to fuck the sister and maby she could run out of pills at some point and make a pregnancy scare for them both would be a great twist
The three have to have more fun together. Also more sweet Tantalus torture for bro/son, this is fun. Thank you.
I'm loving the story but the addition of the mother takes away from the connection that the brother and sister have together.
I made this account just to comment this.
Please continue with Mum and Jenny as original characters. I would love to see spin offs of these 3 in future stories.
Mental images are:
Threesome while dads away. Maybe mum And sis getting into it, jealousy takes hold and their relationship crumbles in a flame pit of competition.
Maybe dad raping Jenny even.
Amazing work you are a very talented author, please listen to others and continue with these characters.
A very good effort, but here are a couple of things I felt on reading the 6 chapters:
1) Chapter 5 was unrealistic - fucking in the back of the car while dad is driving.
2) I was disappointed that the mom did not make another appearance - seems kinds pointless to introduce her in chapter 5.
5 stars from me, nonetheless.
IF you want to improve ( and you really need to ) delete all stories and rewrite then using a GOOD EDITOR and add more background and character development. the best thing any writer on this site can do is ignore the fake rave reviews and only listen to the complaints they are the only HONEST comments you will get. this story died in chapter one and just kept getting worse with every chapter. do yourself and the readers a favor and delete and rewrite and be sure you have someone else read it BEFORE you post it.
I don't normally read the short all sex stories but as you had the decency to warn us at the start of chapter 1 I gave it a try; suffice to say I am glad I did. I found the simple context a delight to read even if I usually want more development and some kind of love story involved. Still not sure on the inclusion of mum as I like to keep it between two protagonists (gang bangs & cuckolding are never my style), however if you do continue with the stories and her participation then I think dad should join in too as there is no point in having his cock go to waste with the eager Jenny around! Those that moan about character development should read the preface to chapter 1 and those that moan about realism, REALLY? These are fantasys based on fiction not reality! Good work!
Liked your story could do without the ass eating but otherwise was entertaining.I saw the anonymous critic's comment maybe it is a grammar teacher.
It's perfect but it needs more or I want to read more either way please add some more to this story about him fucking his sister and mum a lot more after the test
add more chapters maybe have like jenny forget her pill while on holiday and end up pregnant or have dad join in
i went on a lads holiday with my best mate sean we went to blackpool we was both 17 years old we got their had something to eat then got the key to the hotel room and went up i brought my xbox360 with me so we was playing fifa but we soon got bored of that so it was my idea to do some wrestleing it was fun at first but my mate sean got me pined down on the bed he stood over me pulled his pants down and then pulled his underpants down and sit on my face turned on the xbox and strated playing flfa i yell get off but he didnt this was not nice it was disgusting my face was squash and i could n move my head at all sean was overweight and had a big fat sweaty ass unfortunately my face had sunk in to both bum cheeks forcing my face up his fat bumhole and he farted about 8 times and i was like this for 2 hours went he got up i said im going home you took it to far i was sick all the way me and sean sill mate but we dont talk this any moor
I would like to see a few more chapters being that they were all so short but yeah it is a good story and the more the merrier
As others have said - please continue this series. I really enjoyed reading all the chapters so far!
Well, if she was 18 like the story said... the store... Sex stores, while IDing people, will sell to those 18 or older, and that's the US. i'm sure other countries have it lower... But you said it was a 12 hour drive to florida... so yeah... She could've bought it at the store.... Though stay away from that walmart brand stuff, that stuff has no staying power as lube. Dries out way to quick.
Oh and I'm not sure what lube you were using but unless it's edible, you don't wanna ingest that stuff.
This series can't end here, it is too horny. I love the introduction of the mother and the openness between mother and daughter but I agree with other comments, the introduction of the father will spoil it. I like your style. Please keep going.
First chapter had promise but it's just gotten ridiculous now. This lad must have balls like Santa's sack, he blows his load 50 times an hour and stays hard throughout. Ok I'll admit I remember how bad it was as a teen but c'mon dude, this is turning into Sci fi
Loved this series, so hot and kinky. Just wish the son had been able to grt a few more cracks at mom.
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Please keep going. They're rather short pages, but I love the stories. Last time I made it all the way to the end of chapter 5 before I blew, this time you got me in one chapter. You have a lot of potential. Keep up the good work!!!
Decent writing, but this guy clearly has never done anal and probably has never had sex. Ass and vagina never taste good. No, i don't care about what you read online, they don't. They're still fun to eat, but don't pretend that they taste good.
Also going straight from anal to anything else is a great way to get an infection, so don't do that no matter how sexy you think it is.
I can not believe how many writers on this sit use the word maths, when did math become a plural you morons
Good series.
Will you continue?
Like to see an ending with some emotion between Brother and Sister.
Is this over?
Fantastic story, I would prefer if you kept the mum out of their relationship as much as possible, if you someday return to this series. But five stars none the less: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
To the moron commenting about "plural math": long before the Europeans crossed the Atlantic and settled in America, mathematics was invented somewhere in the Fertile Crescent. By the second millennium BC, it had developed into a multidisciplinary field of study.
And as it made its way into Europe, this aspect became embedded in the fledgling Greek language via the PIE language word *mendh- (to learn). This was later transliterated into English as "mathematics" (which, as you may note, is plural both in English and in Greek) and subsequently shortened to "maths."
It was only in the mid-18th-century that "American English" diverged enough from English to call the original "British English" that "maths", a field that had remained multidisciplinary for well over 4000 years, became "math" (though curiously, Americans, in their infinite oxymoroncy still call it mathematics, rather than "mathematic").
Loved this tale. Wouldn't mind reading more of how their time together goes though.