by obhilaash
Great Story. Just a suggestion: Background first would have helped non Indian readers. Otherwise great choice of words and erotic writing. Please write more. Mahabharat would provide many such opportunities. Birth of Dhritrashtra, Vidhur and Pandu. Death of Pandu. Draupadi and many more.
—I plan to take up more myths, thank you
only waiting for more welcoming comments like yours :)
Boon --- Karna 'tis rumoured was born in an Instant & cruelly chucked into the river a la Moses by his biological mother -- thou hast tarried on the dalliance between God & Royal Wench but not given thy readers the Birth of the Grestest Hero of the Kurukshetra Battle , nay , of Mahabharata itself !?! Excellent writin' : 5-ed !
Only word for story 'its brilliant'
Plzz keep on writing more
write about Arjun and Ulupi and Chitrangada and Subhadra; about Draupadi.
Your writing has power. It is as if you are professional writer. Indian Mythology and Mahabharat in particular has powerful plots for writer of your caliber. Write soon.
make about draupadi first, pick up ramayan too make about sita and ravan gangbang, and make one about durga and mahisasura