All Comments on 'Control'

By the lady & Marcy : you have also enumerated a number of stuff / erotic triggers also .Whether this is how she gets him hard & controls his desire depends from Couple to Couple ! Nice poem , good erotica :5-ed.

and the eroticism builds gently but surely as the poem progresses. I think "get" is a typo, yes? Those last two lines, especially, are just wonderful. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing it.

....to read a new poet writing real erotica, none of the all-to-often used porn words. The slow burn is done well with just the right ammount of scene setting. Good to meet you OpenField, I look forward to more of your pieces.

I like the smart use of proper nouns. They give a personal touch in a very subtle way. Some may not recognize "Barbara Stanwyck," but that just adds flavor IMO because you don't really need to know. Very clever.

For some reason Lit is still not letting me comment as greenmountaineer.

Five.