All Comments on 'Down To Me'

I think personally it would read better without all the ands all in all I like what you are doing just not quite the way you did it,

Femaleness kinda clunks. may I suggest femininity?

Could cut a lot out and get as good a final result. Just my 2cents

Creation of Jesus?

You've got good stuff here but Tod is right, less ands would be less clunky and better flow.