I thoroughly enjoyed this.There was enough sex to keep it interesting and the ghost story was supurb.
but the end result is worth it. Very well-written. You do have a thing for renovations though, don't you. ;)
Loved the subtle differences between the ladies in his life and how the little pieces came together. It was kind of sad how Karen was separated from the ghosts, but it also rings true - not everyone is open to the things we can't explain.
Fifteen pages is about all of the reading time that I get for a week, but since it is you (and the comments were so positive) I'll tackle it. Critique later (after I've read it. Ha, ha!)
Harder to do than you think. I've read all your stuff (yeah, the Tx part of it got my attention first; gotta support the republic, yes?) and your longer works are just more well done and thought out. This one sucked me in, as I'm sure was the intent. I really adored the ending--managing to insert War of Northern Imperialism stuff into it and the family continuity is a masterful touch on the haunted house theme.
I'd love to see something centered around Enchanted Rock one of these days. Call it regional pride or even the peculiarly local mass psychosis that is Texas, but the only other writer who could even approach it is StangStar and he's crippled by that tragic Yankee handicap. Besides, there's a distinct flavor to the speech patterns of the Staked Plains and the Hill Country that foreigners just can't duplicate.
Anywho. Fabulous work as always, but this one is even better. Just saying.
This ain't exactly a flash story! I hadn't noticed that you'd written a novel until I clicked forward and them pages just kept coming. It's well worth it though.
Very well done. It kept me hooked all the way through.
You really need to publish this story.
I really thought at some point when the story line said Don had left some bastards out there, and Jack had grown up without knowing his parents, that Jack was going to end up being a true son of Don and Bevs blood nephew!
Enchanting story but too many questions, red herrings, plot lines unfinished. It feels like you hurried it at the end.
I was certain Jack was Don's illegitimate son/grandson? That would explain so much, such as his obsession with the house, and his affinity with Mary and Bev at the end. And why all the emphasis on the broach and ring that went nowhere? I want to know what Bev was thinking at the end, and did she kill herself? Did she have a heart attack? and how did she know that she'd be able to help? Just so many open questions. After so many pages, I think one more page could have tied a lot of it up nicely.
As someone else said, I felt sorry for Karen, that she was left out in the cold, unable to communicate or even recognize the other ghosts. How is it the 'bad' ones had so much control over her, when the others had none.
It was still a rollicking story, with an unusual ghostly relationship that really worked for me. Great stuff as usual. Just wish you tied up the loose ends. Maybe there's another story here.
This was evocative. It's very well done, though the ending felt a bit rushed. Not so much the solution but the rush there. I loved it. Pretty far from some of your ventures but one of your best. There's love here, not just sex, and that is what helps make it so strong.
Loved it, could do with some plot lines being finished but still well worth 5*.
I peruse a lot of the stories here on Literotica, and I find this a very descriptive, entertaining story. TexasTallTales has done an outstanding job of placing my vivid imagination within this tale, and the proof to that is when the characters almost come to life. Well done!
I love that he could see Mary and Bev could talk to her. I've always thought that if there was a ghost around, I'd hear it, but not see it. I'm all auditory. That brought realism to the fantasy.
I also suspected that Jack was Don's son. I think I'll just choose to believe that's the case.
It was worth waiting for. I love these people.
Obviously the timeline would be a little off. :-/
I can't thank you enough for this wonderful and touching story. Wow. Just....wow!
That Old House should win the Halloween contest going away.
This is a story that Hollywood could do well if they were smart enough to do it and hire the right director --maybe Spielberg?
But who were the evil spirits? Why were they there?
Easily one of your best ever. Thank you so much.
Loved it! Thank you for sharing your story with us!
This the possibly the best story of any genre I've read in a very long time. Thank you.
I have, until now, not found a story on here worth commenting on. Just fantastic. My one wish is that the evil upstairs had been explained, but even that seemed to fit the story! Keep up the fantastic work and you will be in print in no time.
from details in the story it appears you have read some of the Warrens work on demonology, the beings on the third floor match some of their experiences very closely to cases involving very powerful demons.
overall a very good read, I was expecting the main character to be related to Bev because of his affinity for Mary and that family connection
I loved this story. Having been through a couple of home renovations myself, I enjoyed that part of the story line. Great sex without making it repetitive. I gave you a 5/5.
Well there's just too many positives to list. So I'm going to do an HIV & go completely negative . HUGE FLAW no. 1 ; they're not ( yet ) making a movie adaption of this story so I could see the adaption of this storythis upcoming weekend.
My humble suggestion is to reunite Ryan Gosling & Christina Hendricks to play buxom Karen from 'The Driver' to play the leading ( & living ) male/ female roles. HUGE FLAW no.2 : there's no sassy, supporting female character role for Whoopi Goldberg to play. Demi Moore could play Mary if there's LOTS of Vaseline on camera lens & zipper to R.G. 's trousers..
In all seriousness TxTallTales appears to have another hot rating in yet another category. Gay Male appears to only story phylum sacrosanct from his talents. Whew ( not that there's anything wrong with that) !
If I have to read any more like this one I'll never get any sleep. This isn't scary except for how well the story is put together. No, my problem is that it is usually between 10 and 11 at night before I can get started on a story.
I have to agree with another commentator, this will probably turn into a movie.
I do have one question for the writer, (nothing bad or even story related for that matter); how long does it take you personally to write something like this once you've got the basic idea in mind?
Thanks for a really enjoyable tale.
Thank you.....yet again
The best story I have ever read on here! You did an amazing job giving characters just enough detail to interest and make us care. Enough so our imaginations filled in the rest. The sex fit the rest of the story without givivg the reader every drooling detail. Excellent job and can't wait to read more stories from you.
sorry for my bad english i am from germany and english is a bit difficult for me ....
but this story is the very best i ever read ... and i have read many.....
go on budy take your pencil an write .....
W R I T E !!!
you are a brilliant rider and storyteller
I can only say one word about this story. OMG had me hooked from the first sentence. Well done. And I agree with the author, kind of hard to find the right category for this one, but whatever category it's in, it's still an amazing piece of work.
Fifteen pages and I want more! MORE! How sick is that? I just discovered you, I think I'm going to go now and see what else I've missed. This was a gem.
I generally like all your stories, although some are a bit of for me. However, this one is a 5. Not overly sappy, it's sexy, romantic, and descriptive. This is a winner.
What a great story.
You really know how to spin a tale - this was well worth the read.
I am in no way a critic and in truth I don't know my hat from my arsehole when it comes to how to write a story - but this is really good - as are so many of your other stories.
Well done and a sincere thank you.
Thank you for all your effort in cranking out all those pages of fabulous, exciting, scary, and yes, erotic, prose. It is one damn fine story. Tx Tall Tales, you've outdone yourself this time.
Someday, I hope to post a story that's half as good as this one.
If this story doesn't make it into the top ten of the all-time erotic horror category, I'll eat my hat.
In my humble opinion, I think we've found a winner in the Halloween contest.
Damn Boss, you hit this one out of the park. Keep up the great work.
This is one of your best stories TTT! I loved it! Keep up the great writing.
This storie should be ranked among the literotica alltime classics.
Great story, engaging storyline and a good mix of normal and paranormal content made for an interesting read. 5/5
you have been so wonderful writing such a beautiful story with horror,romance,fiction,.......all that i love about...thanks for such a story..and keeping rock'ng
I only read it because of the author, but what a great story. I love how much effort you're putting into developing characters and giving them life, rather than just focussing on sex. I also love having more time to spend with the characters; I hope you will write more!
Well paced romantic story. One of the best on the site. Erotic and interesting. Is truly a great Tall Tale!
Tx Tall Tales has set a new standard that he and other writers are going find hard to match. I have a feeling a new genre has been started and wait with anticipation for future mini novels of the same quality. It was a treat to read. Congratulations.
The story is awesome. I like it a lot. The big fight at the end was kinda quick. The slow burn with Mary was rager inspiring. I thought the way he claimed Bev as Mother was cool.
Well, it's certainly an extremely impressive effort (5 stars from me), but I do feel disappointed at how the story progressed from the 4th page or so, especially at how it ended. Would have preferred a happy, sappy ending with Jack with Mary, instead of Karen being dragged in.
And being the hopeless romantic that I am, I would very much like if you would write a sweet, simple, love story between two people. Much like "M&M Kisses"
Rarely do I find myself on the cusp of literary eloquence but this is as good as it gets for me, of course I am just a simple guy who has only attended the school of hard knocks but this has all the excitement of a fairy tale to me... I relate to all the characters as I am also adopted in a foreign country so there is no way I could have ever found my birth parents and I was raised with not many happy moments and always alone so kudos for this one, it has intelligence, poise, wit, charm, terror, depression and in the end a happy balance and in some way this has given me some closure so thank you... Your future efforts will also get my most favored status in reading...
Your Friend Sam...
Thank you for this amazing story!
I think u should be writing mainstream novels+- I would definitely buy them!!!
Talk about a page turner. I couldn't stop reading once I started. Fine job TTT, damn fine job.
Your stories always tend to be page turners even if I don't like the outcome, but that's the best damn story i've ever read I think.
Great story as usual.
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