All Comments on 'On the Origin of Language'

Line 8 should read:

"where burns the Agh! that squints his eyes"

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uh huh huh

5ed

although i suspect it is a little more complex than that

Your substitutions are plausible and work well to convey the words they represent. Your edit makes the line work better, too. I think it must have happened pretty much how you've portrayed it! Thank you for this delightful read.

That is how animals name things, if in fact, they do. Enjoyed very much.

Was wanting it to go on and on loved the sounds and cadence and the story

(this could all be total bullshit, however it is the bullshit I think I see and hear)

are so damn good, the spacing on them is damn near perfect for the rhymes to support and resonate with each other,

and heard a threat he knew as Roar!

and saw a Caw! fly by

three rhymes roar, saw, caw, but having the exclamation point almost makes it an end of line rhyme with roar, saw is not lost but takes a back seat leaving its resonant mark on the line, having

fly by

before jumping to the next stanza interrupts the sound of that rhyme, as you use saw again in the next stanza but it doesn't feel like an echo as it does in other poems.

to top it off the story in there is really damn good as well, hats off GM, well done.

Your written word is perfect; you are truly a gifted poet.