by Mnprnwriter
As it's a part 1 can't wait for number 2 to see if romance blossoms and maybe a 4 some or partner swap with Heidi and her sister as the story tells about the swinging parties.
No tension, no suspense - other than the girl hesitated momentarily. Scarcely a seduction - and at 22 Heidi wasn't exactly an old maid. Make her fifteen years old it would be different
Poor writing and a lazy-assed plot nuked what might have been a decent story...
Not great, but not bad, seem to follow along the same lines as other first times with very little changes.
Still an enjoyable read.
The next few chapters are in the works, letting them sit for a few weeks to add perspective during the editing process.
This was something like one of the virgins I enjoyed being first with, and she sobbed, moaned and cursed me and every other way to say she enjoyed having her first experience. Yvonne had a body like a model, except for the thick, wide long tuff of straight dark colored hair covering her vagina. Many times after that she would become a wild woman, suddenly I lost interest in her. Perhaps it was two years later I next saw her and she invited me to her apartment, and she cursed me for taking her virginity and not marrying her. Last I heard she went back to West Virginia.