It had a wonderful body, and a wonderful beginning.. but the end just sort of stopped. i would of liked to see Tori developed more as a sub. Speaking from a submissive's point, there is so much more that you could do with that. I hope you are encouraged to write more, and i hope to be reading more from you in the future. You have done a wonderful job on this.
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