All Comments on 'The First Meeting'

But weaker than the previous chapters. Didn't like these guys too much. You missed a great opportunity for some neat interaction with the father and settled for cheap, gratuitous, improbable sex. Can't say I'm looking forward to the next chapter...

I do like your stories, however I think they need to be a little longer with more details on the action parts. I like the lead ins as it sets the sence well. I do not really think that this was weaker. However it would have been interesting to see what would have happened had the brother came down and seen the action,Would he join in?