All Comments on '6 Mums in a Still Life'

....no one has commented on this lovely poem yet. The images are beautiful and the emotion well worded.

I do not use the thermometer

last stanza sang

...poem from you today. Great phrasing and feeling. Everything I read from you impresses me. I suggest you consider a comma after the word 'vase' -- and also a rewrite of the following lines:

Pieces of shell stolen from the beach

lie scattered around the vase

silent testament to days passed

and dreams lost. Silent shells

that no longer hold the ocean's roar

by simply removing the word 'that', or

somehow rewording to avoid repeating the words 'silent' + 'shells' a second time. If the word 'that' is gone, you have a complete thought and not a sentence fragment there, and then the repeats seem okay to me.

left-behind objects, a mother's tears nourish her children... excellent work

very touching! i'm sure for every mother reading, words that hit us where we feel the deepest...our children!

this was beautiful!

...that you can capture the light and the dark sides of life so well.

I liked this poem.

"...the incredible eloquence that the poet possesses. Read, and be mezmerised..."

my comments would only understate my feelings on this one. beautiful, beautiful.

light

R~~~

A verbal painting of a watercolor work

Capturing an incredible amount of detail and feeling.

Such a delicate way with words that distills their essense for the reader's own private enjoyment. A Jewel!