All Comments on 'A Dirty Job'

'It's the just being alive

that steals away your innocence,' no fucking doubt.

between Satan and Jesus, TK U MLJ LV NV

as has been said none of us get out of this life alive

but that's a sad day in hell.

I had a hiccup in your narration here

It's the just being alive

that steals away your innocence."

he said this with what seemed to be an honest sadness

and then looked off into the distance.

I could suggest cutting it to simply

Just being alive steals away your innocence

but its neither here no there

the rest is strong narration with an everyman feel to your narrator, and enough description of the horrors for the readers mind to conjure some seriously horrible images.

nice work is probably not where this sits, but damn good writing