by Goldeniangel
While the build-up to the end of the poen was good, the final few lines toss the whole subject of the poem to the winds of perversion.
THIS IS SICK AND SHOULD BE REMOVED. IT IS PEDOPHILIA!!!
Perverted? Bah. It's a darn good image. I wish I had thought of it, or better yet, I wish I had a little of that candy myself.
Enjoyed the poem.
Is Anonymous aka Asshole stalking you?
Sincerely
Richard
and sweetly sensual poem.. ignore the shitheads that can't see the quality and feelings that you put into this poem.
Capitalizsation and punctuation could make this great. It's flat because of that. Please fix this lovely piece.