by Maldoror
Maldoror-
you spin this poem with rich, unique, phrasing, thoughtful, careful metaphor-- some pieces were bordering genius, you spin this poem also with sex education descriptions of what cock is doing where clit is now and it took so much of the poem from me, I am not afraid of cock or clit, but if you took out or worked on some of the more geographical biological aspects of thie poem, it would be even more erotic.
in my humble opinion--
:)
~a