All Comments on 'A Nobler Path'

It is a bit long, I admit. Usually I prefer the sonnet or some other form that limits the number of lines I can use. I tried that here, but I felt the emotions were too complex to squeeze into a shorter form. Maybe I'm coming at it the wrong way. Maybe I'm just too close to the subject matter.

I'm no poetry expert; I just play around with it and post stuff here that I don't think will sell to my other markets. It's cathartic for me, and helps me sharpen my prose too.

Thanks for your comments. They are always welcome.

You can obviously write pretty well and you don't wrench your rhymes, I am thankful for but I think, like twelveoone, that this is too long. I think a better approach would be to focus on a single incident or maybe to that sum up the end of the marriage. There is not a lot of 'things' in this poem. Poetry is about feelings arrived at through things. I see talent in you.

Inverted syntax, for the sake of a rime and an obvious reach

Then with this futile marriage I'll be done.

Says way too much, shorten it. Looks like an emotion dump in verse. You are a better writer than that.